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Scene #8 Diana Quirós Draft #5 "Well, greetings intrepid, young man." Heziah said in that husky voice of his. "H-Hi." Christopher's voice trembled in fear as he stuttered his words. Heziah laughed as he caused Livingston a lot of internal pain. "Stop! Stop please!" Livingston pleaded as Heziah's spiritual force made Livingston feel more tired and with the desire to give up. "Heziah if you leave my brother peacefully living in Earth, I grant you my permission for you to take me with me." Christopher reluctantly offered. Heziah's red eyes lit up to Christopher's proposal and his thin lips curved up into a cocky smile. "Why would you say that, young man?" Heziah said, still smiling. "I'm tired of seeing Livingston suffer so much. I owe him greatly." Christopher said. "Swell." Heziah said as he prepared himself to get into Christopher's body. "Farewell, Livingston." Christopher said just before his eyes turned red and he felted the pain, yet innocence, of the spiteful demon settling inside his soul.

Scene #2 Eleonora ten Brink Draft #3 Christopher was eager to see Rose again, and he had bought at the nice little farmer's market, on the way here, potatoes and margarine to make Rose's favorite dish; potatoes baked with fresh rosemary from her garden. He fumbled with the groceries, struggling to get a grip on the slippery brown paper bags. Finally he gave up and set them on the ground. He walked up the delicate-looking white wooden porch, with its petite steps, and noticed the large fine door of her house was ajar. ‘How strange’ he thought. ‘Rose?’ Christopher called, concerned. He gingerly stepped into the house and called again for Rose. No answer. The whole house was calm and cold. There was no one in the vestibule. The he noticed Rose’s cat, perched on a chair, trembling. This was //very// strange, as he was a sweet and perky cat. As he approached the cat, he let out a long pained wail. Christopher barged into the living room as something was very wrong. Then he stopped in shock. There lay Rose, immobile on the ground. She was in an awkward position, her clothes torn and charred. Christopher was standing there staring, his vision became woozy, and he felt the most awful knot swell up inside his stomach and rack through his chest and body, barely noticing as the cat jumped from his arms. Rose was still breathing, but only very shallowly and painfully… she was agonizing. Christopher loped towards her and took her hand. Rose let a faint whisper escape her lips: ‘Livingston… he… was here…’ Then she sighed her last breath and her beautiful blue eyes closed for the last time. Christopher doubled over as if he had been stabbed and started sobbing over her still body. The cat curled up next to him and Christpher sobbed into his soft fur. Suddenly, a noise was heard and Rose’s maid apeared in the doorway. ‘Oh Mr. Christopher… it was your brother Livingston.. He killed Miss Rose!!! He tried to seduce her but she was very adamant that she already had a boyfriend… then he took out thse huger laser guns and threatened her to kill her, unless she conceded. She didn’t and this is what happened… ! I only had time to hide in the cupboard so as to save myself, or I would surely have been killed.’ Then she steadied herself on the sofa and started sobbing too.

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Scene 2: Christopher arrives at his girlfriend's (Rose) door and finds it slightly ajar. She is laying on livingroom floor with burn marks all over her body. She is barely alive. She whispers the name of Christopher's brother, Livingston, "Livingston....he was here" and then she dies. The maid who had been hiding in the storage room tells him what happened: Livingston had tried to seduce Rose unsuccessfully and had killed her with his lazers when he became enraged. Christopher goes mad with grief. (elenora / irene / maite/ mesalles)

Scene 3: In his state of grief and confusion, Christopher goes to the church where the father McKinley, an old family friend, stays. He tells the priest that this is the third incident relating to Livingston after the death of their mother the year before. His best friend was in a wheelchair b/c L. pushed down the stairs during a confrontation at Christopher's home. He had lost his job as an accountant b/c of rumors (by L.) suggesting that he had stolen money. The preist tells him that L. has visited him and that he has "lost his soul to a demon" b/c he has given up on goodness since the death of their mother. (rumiko / miranda)

Scene 4: As the two are talking L. appears. L goes directly towards his brother and grabs him by the neck then C. starts talking about their mother and how he regrets not being there for the two of them. L. lets go but his demon side is enraged and his human side is losing control. L. turns in anger towards the priest and shoots him with one of his lazers the priest dies inmediately. L. tries to shoot his brither too but cant and leaves. While C. is left alone in his grief and despair. (minchee / christina )

Scene 5: C. is lost and doesn't know what to do. In a fit of anger he destroys the inside of his home and drinks an entire bottle of whisky. He ends up asleep in the cemetery where his mother, father, and soon his girlfriend as well, are buried. (folke / arturo / ivan / kevin)

Scene 6: As C. is past out in the cemetery a vision of his mother tells him that their is hope for his brother for their is still goodenss in him. the mother tells him that to save his brother from the evil side he mut sacrifice himself. C. finds that after everything was ripped away from him he could still save someone. He decides to do as his mother says. (nick / tony / harrison)

Scene 7: His mother also tells him whers L. is located, in their old house in the outer skirts of town. After some preparing C. heads out with his hope high that he can at least save his brother. Once C. gets there a great fight occurs. L. thinks that if he only gets rid of C. he will finally be free to do whatever he wants. So he is surprised when he sees C. point a knife at his neck. (erin / mafa)

Scene 8: C. kills himself and the demon in L. dissapears however L. lives with the guilt and pain to have killed his brother. (diana / arianna)