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Alex Fleisch The Rat Trap Part 9 It was a dark, cold November night. There was no moon that night and the wind was quite strong. Star Rellik was walking home from work at the factory with her long grey overcoat on. Huddling up in her over coat and her hands deep inside her pockets, a newspaper clipping whirled by. She picked it up with her pale small hands. -- …Possible suicide in the factory, the poor man was Charlie Burkes. He was found hung in Tom (Last Name) house with surprising gnawing marks all over him. There is doubt this was a suicide, scientists are searching the body for any more hints and clues to the… -- Star smiled. Her mouth opened slightly, as if to chuckle, but no sound came out. But still she left it open. A long pink tail whipped out of Star's mouth as quick as lighting. Star's eyes opened wide and closed her mouth shut. She looked around to see if anyone saw, but the street was abandoned as it always was at 9:30. She stuffed the article in her overcoat and kept walking in through the cold foggy night of November 29, 1864.

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It was a dark, cold November night. There was no moon and the wind was quite strong. Star Rellik was walking home from work at the factory with her long grey overcoat on. Huddling up in her over coat and her hands deep inside her pockets, a newspaper clipping whirled by. She picked it up with her small pale hands. =====

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-- …Possible suicide in the factory, the poor man was Charlie Burkes …was found hung in Tom Evan’s house, …surprising gnawing marks all over him. …Doubt this was a suicide, detectives searching the body for any more hints and clues to the… -- =====

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Star smiled. Her mouth opened slightly, as if to chuckle, but no sound came out. But still her mouth stood open. A long pink tail whipped out of Star's mouth as quick as lighting. Star's eyes opened wide and closed her mouth shut. She looked around to see if anyone saw, but the street was abandoned as it always was at 9:30 on a night like this. She stuffed the article in her overcoat and kept walking in through the cold foggy night of November 29, 1864. =====

Alex Fleisch Draft 3

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It was a dark, cold November night. There was no moon and the wind was quite strong. Star Rellik was walking home from work at the factory with her long grey overcoat on. The street lights flickered every now and then, and the buildings around her cast eerie shadows all over the street. but Star just kept on walking. Huddling up in her over coat with her hands deep inside her pockets, a newspaper clipping whirled by. She picked it up with her small pale hands. =====

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-- …Possible suicide, ...this man worked for the "Rats and Traps" factory, the poor man was Charlie Burkes …was found hung in his bedroom, …surprising gnawing marks all over him. …Doubt this was a suicide, detectives searching the body for any more hints and clues to the… -- =====

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Star smiled. Her mouth opened slightly, as if to chuckle, but no sound came out. But still her mouth stood open. A long pink tail whipped out of Star's mouth as quick as lighting. Star's eyes darted wide open she and snapped her mouth shut. She scanned around to see if anyone saw, but the street was abandoned as it always was at 9:30 on a night like this. She stuffed the article in her overcoat and kept walking through the cold foggy night of November 13, 1864. =====

Alex Fleisch Draft 4

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It was a dark, cold November night. There was no moon and the wind was quite strong. Star Rellik was walking home from work at the factory with her long grey overcoat on. The street lights flickered every now and then, and the buildings around her cast eerie shadows all over the street. but Star just kept on walking. Huddling up in her over coat with her hands deep inside her pockets, a newspaper clipping whirled by. She picked it up with her small pale hands. =====

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-- ...Two people found hung in their houses; Tom Ward and Charlie Burkes. Detectives think death is linked. Small gnaw marks found all over body. Doubt this was a suicide. Detectives still searching for more hints... -- =====

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Star smiled. Her mouth opened slightly, as if to chuckle, but no sound came out. But still her mouth stood open. A long pink tail whipped out of Star's mouth as quick as lighting. Star's eyes darted wide open she and snapped her mouth shut. She scanned around to see if anyone saw, but the street was abandoned as it always was at 9:30 on a night like this. She stuffed the article in her overcoat and kept walking through the cold foggy night of Friday, November 13, 1864. =====

Alex Fleisch Draft 5 Mix with Michael's newspaper part  It was a dark, cold November night. There was no moon and the wind was quite strong. Star was walking home from work at the factory with her long grey overcoat on. The street lights flickered every now and then, and the buildings around her cast eerie shadows all over the street, but she just kept on walking. Huddling up in her over coat with her hands deep inside her pockets, a newspaper clipping whirled by. Star picked it up with her small pale hands.

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"The factory around the corner of the block where the bread store named Hedrick’s Breads is has experienced yet another tragic murder. After several incidents that were documented, all were reported having gnawed marks all over the bodies. Charlie Burkes is dead. His funeral will be held on November 17th.” -- =====

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Star smiled. Her mouth opened slightly, as if to chuckle, but no sound came out. But still her mouth stood open. A long pink tail whipped out of her mouth as quick as lighting. Star's eyes darted wide open she and snapped her mouth shut. She scanned around to see if anyone saw, but the street was abandoned as it always was at 9:30 on a night like this. The lady, known as Star to her fellow friends, stuffed the article in her overcoat and kept walking through the cold foggy night of Friday, November 13, 1864. =====

The chilly wind played with the woman’s hair as she picked her way carefully down the cobblestone streets, pausing every so often to examine her long, manicured fingernails and reapply blush. A newspaper, brought by the swirling wind, fluttered for a mere second in the air and then dropped to the floor in front of the woman. Slowly, she bent down to retrieve it. Sunlight escaped a few of the clouds and formed a small halo of light above the newspaper. The woman began to read, smiling. Star Rellick tucked the newspaper under her arms and walked away. A long, naked tail flashed between her teeth for just a second and then slithered back down her throat. A rats’ tail.

A newspaper clipping blew across the cloudy sky, whirled around trees in the night of London, and landed under the light of a lamp post. A woman walked past the piece of newspaper, and picked it up. She started reading the newspaper, and it said //“, the factory around the corner of the block where the bread store named Hedrick’s Breads has had yet another death. After several incidents, all were reported having gnawed marks all over the bodies. Charlie Bucks is dead. His funeral will be held on October 17th. Article by Star Daed.”// The woman slowly let go of the clipping, and smiled. She hiccupped out a furry tail, which didn’t make it out the “mouth”, and stuffed it back in her throat in a disgusting way. For the woman’s eyes were yellow with a red iris. And her name was Star. By Michael S

2nd Draft A newspaper clipping blew across the cloudy sky, whirled around trees in the night of London, and landed under the light of a foggy lamp post. A woman walked past the piece of newspaper, and ignored it. Then she looked back at the small clip under the flickering light. She started reading the newspaper, and it said //“, the factory around the corner of the block where the bread store named Hedrick’s Breads has had yet another death. After several incidents, all were reported having gnawed marks all over the bodies. Charlie Burks is dead. His funeral will be held on October 17th.”// The woman slowly let go of the clipping, and smiled. She hiccupped out a furry tail, which didn’t make it out her mouth, and stuffed it back in her throat in a gruesome way. For the woman’s eyes were yellow with a red iris. She started to walk again, smiling, and she had a grin full of rotten rat teeth, and dissolved into millions of squealing, bloodied and viscous rats until there was no more human left of her. That is why we know why killer rats are not seen, but are in every bloody corner.

3rd Draft

A newspaper clipping blew across the cloudy and slightly moon-lit sky whirling around trees in the night of the London streets. Then it landed under the light of a foggy lamp post. Laying in wait, the information on the paper was a grim, tragic news. It was a long time until a figure in the fog was coming out of the thick, soupy air. A woman walked out of the shadows and passed the piece of newspaper, ignoring it. She turned to look back at the small clip under the flickering light. Then started reading the newspaper with difficulty in the dimness of the whale oil candle lamp post, and it said //“, the factory around the corner of the block where the bread store named Hedrick’s Breads is has experienced yet another tragic murder. After several incidents that were documented, all were reported having gnawed marks all over the bodies. Charlie Burks is dead. His funeral will be held on October 17th.” // These words had an important meaning to the woman. She slowly let go of the clipping, let it sway to the floor calmly, and grinned a satisfied smile. Then she burped a furry tail, which didn’t make it out her mouth, and stuffed it back in her throat in such a horrible manner that even flies would be disgusted. For the woman’s eyes were yellow with a red iris, as maroon as the colors of anger fused with the colors of love. She started to walk again, smiling, and she had a grin full of yellow teeth that were rather taken care for in those days. This woman had a red string around her finger, because she made a sin she did not regret doing. Then, under the light of the lamp post, she dissolved into millions of squealing, bloodied, viscous rats until there was no more human left of her. All of the rats scurried to places like boxes, pipes, sewers and even in housings. And what Tom said is true, one female rat can have thousands of offspring in one year. That is the reason there were so many rats looking for some filth to roll in coming from the woman's body. But just one question, do you know the murderer? . ..